Awestruck Comments

Riders - I enjoyed this "interview." Curry swept through the room like a mighty wind, and he carried such a sense of presence in your story. The whole thing felt strong and fast, but relaxed and unhurried at the same time, rather like a Kid Curry quick draw. I believe that his character in the series (like the one your portrayed) was more honest and less cynical than his partner. His answer to the jaded, old adage that "no good deed goes unpunished" is the one I believe to be truth, so it's not surprising that I really like this story. Great job!

Riders - I'm glad you continued this give a different perspective, and like Skykomish, I think you've captured Kid's personality really well. He's full of business and very direct, but way less cynical than Heyes. I like the analysis of Heyes having to prove that he was tough vs that being a given for a gunslinger. Really well written and thanks for continuing this

Riders: glad I waited to comment until after the second post! You really put across the differences in character for our two boys. I do like Heyes' world-weary, cynical "We were just bandits." It's a great closing line and it's great Heyes.

HannahHeyes -- glad you finished your story and rescued our boys. So despicable to use his daughter -- glad he got his comeuppance.

Nice completion to your story HannahHeyes. I especially got a kick out of Heyes apologizing to her on account of who she's married to! "That's alright, my mother tells me the same thing"!

HannaHeyes: A very appropriate finish to the whole story! Madeline was a great character and it serves her husband right. Loved this part, which I think showcases both boys' personalities perfectly: "Well, Ma'am, if you would be so nice as to bring me my gunbelt, I can get this door open without the key," Heyes grinned at her. "Just bring both gunbelts," Kid interjected.

Hannah: So glad you finished the story, and good for Madeline!

Hannahheyes: glad for the continuation. Loved Madeline's flirting with "danger". I also loved the politeness of Heyes asking for his gun belt and Kid huffing that he wanted HIS , too! Shame on the husband, risking his daughter like that!!!!

InsideOutlaw: Interesting look at the relationship between our boys. And a frustrated Wheat is always fun to see.

Sky: Yikes! Ok, we get to guess which one is the protagonist (hm…think I’ve done that a time or two). Sad and full of regret, but deep love, too.

Christina: Yes…the Kid (who can always be trusted to do the wrong thing when there’s a girl involved) gets in trouble. Funny take on the challenge and nice little twist.

FORTITUDINE - I liked the chivalry Heyes showed in your story in that he wanted to protect a young, innocent girl he didn't even really know from a sleazy saloon owner. And the way he finally managed it was a classic, sneaky Heyes maneuver. Nicely done

Good one Fort! Heyes always did know how to use his head, even if it did wind up getting him into trouble. Very sensable; Good time to leave town.

Fortitudine -- wonderful story. Like how Heyes resolved his dilemma then got out of town before his good deed got punished. Some wonderful lines. Two of my favorites: Big John was a man of parts and all of them bad. and glancing fearfully around at the drunks and the harlots and all the other trash that piles up behind buildings in the wrong part of a cow town.

HannaHeyes - I'm glad to see that you continued this and I could see why Madeleine was so mad at her husband for using a little girl like that. What a great way to get them out jail and see 'Pa' hoist with his own petard!

Fortitudine - I really enjoyed this story of a ragged, teenage Heyes and I laughed at the clever way he tricked the girl out of Big John's clutches. You always get such great little asides in your stories and wonderful lines in your stories. I do love your writing and always look forward to reading yours.

HannaHeyes - I'm glad that someone in that family showed some sense. That poor little girl has her mother to look out for her. Madeline seems to have the needed skills to handle her husband. Thanks for continuing the story.

Fortitudine - I always love your descriptions. They convey so much without a lot of words. "His name was mentioned with respect by the pimps and the gunmen, the sharpers and the fancy women. Big John was a man of parts and all of them bad." or "...glancing fearfully around at the drunks and the harlots and all the other trash that piles up behind buildings in the wrong part of a cow town." Heyes' comments to the girl at the end were great. Just the right tone to send a nice girl fleeing away from Big John. Wonderful story!

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Sky: Yikes! Ok, we get to guess which one is the protagonist (hm…think I’ve done that a time or two). Sad and full of regret, but deep love, too.


Fort - Thank you for confusing me with SilverKelpie. I'm flattered, but Ms. Kelpie wrote the angst filled and tragic short piece you referenced above. I, alas, have yet to enter this month's challenge.

Och, Sky! I'm very flattered that someone mistook my work for yours.

Fortitudine: Very interesting story! I really like how readers are left to wonder what exactly was going on. There could be more than one plausible reason for Overton's behavior but, trust Heyes to leap to a conclusion and then imagine all sorts of things. Yup, it would definitely be a good idea to leave Wichita...before something awful happens!

Skykomish and SilverKelpie: My fingers typed "SK" and then that "Y" just slipped in.

(that's my story, and I'm sticking to it!)

Riders57; Heyes is so trusting isn't he? At least when it comes to his partner's aim. And it takes a perfectionist to feel that he's just not shooting up to snuff when one bullet is just not quite center! Good little snippit and really shows the character of both fellas, and the trust between them.

InsideOutlaw; Well now you've got me waiting for the full story! As in; what happened to Heyes and what did the bounty hunter's sister do?! I hope you're going to post the rest of it soon!! Loved the beginning by the way. Nice twist.

Well I was going to wait and try to catch all the last minute submissions at once -- but there's still 6 hours left and it's time to comment....

Penski -- great take on the prompt. Love the continuing repurcussions of their experience with the Browns and love the foreshadowing -- guns = trouble and leader of a gang of thieves. Glad to see Heyes' leadership qualities already coming to the fore here. Altogether a very enjoyable read.

PENSKI - Really enjoyed this story! Favorite lines were "We'd still be there if you hadn't of burn down their shed" and Heyes saying, "Imagine, me, being the leader of a gang of thieves." Fred and George needed a good butt-whooping ;) Good story

Good story Penski; I always like the stories of Jed and Han when they were still young and a little less cynical. Han's leadership qualities really come through here, and as mentioned by others; got a kick out of the foreshadowing--imagin Heyes becoming the leader of a gang of thieves!
A followup would be intersting as to what happens to the siblings after they've gone their seperate ways. The twins are obviously headed for trouble!