Awestruck Comments

Ghislaine - Very short and sweet challenge. And a very different take on the prompt, too, I might add. Can I see Heyes saying "Nevertheless"? Not really. I see him more saying "But it’s wrong. It should have an ‘i,’ not a ‘y.’” Possibly more coming? Now that's a good deal!

Ghislaine: Leave it to Heyes to notice the wrong spelling! But to go along with Penski, I can't really hear Heyes saying 'nevertheless'. Nice though! I hope you turn this into a story; sounds like a good beginning. :-)

Where can I find these stories? Arrgh, being a new person really stinks.

Cornelia - go click on 'The Story Challenge' then scroll down under 'Topics'. You'll see a word or phrase for each month. This month is 'Bounty.' Hope this helps!

Ghislaine - I think it's very like Heyes to point out something is not spelled right. Like Kid's thoughts on the whole thing. Looking forward to reading a longer version of this (I hope!)

Ghislaine -- interesting short story. Of course, while not spelling correctly may mean they're less careful about things, spelling it "bounty-ful" could mean that they are more interested in bounties than most towns too. Re: you're question -- I agree with Penski, I don't see Heyes saying "nevertheless." Not sure he'd know how to spell the word bountiful either, but it's certainly possible so....

SisterGrace: This was short, sweet and I just thought it was cute! Very clever, too, to think of the HMS 'Bounty'.

Like everyone else is saying Ghis; short and sweet! It didn't bother me hearing Heyes say; nevertheless. He likes words so he might just be trying it on for size. One of the things that always bothered me in the series was in STGHA when Kid is reading the letter and asked Heyes; "Doesn't or don't?" And Heyes answered; "Don't." That didn't set right with me because Heyes reads a lot and he would know the difference, IMO that is! Cute little diddy though and I hope you do develop it into something longer!

Allegra - Well, of course they're worth it, because they can bluff so well as they prove in this one! Always sparkling dialogue with your stories, and this is no exception. Great take on the prompt and these lines speak volumes on the unusual lifestyle of the boys:

“Next time you untie us,” Heyes grouched.

“It was your turn,” Kid retorted.

Ghislaine - Short and sweet seems to be everyone's opinion of this one, and the sugar on top is the promise of a longer story. Can I see Heyes saying nevertheless? I can see him trying it out if he'd read it somewhere. Maybe he'd repeat it enough in sentences to annoy the Kid - that seems in character for both of them to me.

Allegra - I love the line “Whatever you’re doin’, you’re not doin’ it fast enough,” it just captures the nature of the relationship between them so well, bouncing off one another - literally in this case. I do love a devious Heyes and his bluffing certainly pays off in this one. So glad to see you back.

Ghislaine - Love the Kid's reasoning that they may not be careful about other things if they don't make sure their town name is spelled correctly. So glad to see that this is part of a larger story. Would Heyes say 'nevertheless?' I'll have to get all the DVDs out to check if he ever did. Any excuse, eh?

Penski: From the beginning, vividly reminding us of the start of our heroes' amnesty adventures, to the twist on the train and the uneasy ending, this was a fun story! I really liked how you wrote the Kid. And, of course, how you inserted real people into the story, as is your wont. Favorite line, which is a nice reference: “You need to not be so cheap and put in a better lock.”

Penski - So that's who upped the bounty on the boys! You wrote Heyes and Curry very much in character. Very enjoyable story

Ghislaine

And so Heyes is a spelling pedant - I knew it! 'Nevertheless' I love the reasoning that if a town's not too careful about spelling and such, then it might also not be so bothered about just who pays them a visit. I always think it's great when the Kid thinks! Lovely dialogue and excellent snippet.

Would Heyes say 'nevertheless'? Maybe - At the risk of 'thinkin' again' he might have used the phrases; "All the same", or "even so" or even just a straight "No, it's wrong." I am pretty sure he has a rich vocabulary and I can't hear anything wrong with what you used. It wouldn't have occurred to me to question it if you hadn't asked. He's a smart guy after all and he reads a lot which always helps.


Penski

Tsk, tsk - those boys winding up the railroads again and this time getting them cross enough not only to put a pretty hefty bounty on their heads but make it a 'dead of alive' reward.

Love the visit to the private car and then nicking all the booze for a knees up later. Mind you, that's probably what turned the reward into a 'dead or alive' deal. It would bring a whole new meaning to the warnings of alcohol being bad for your health now wouldn't it! Great story and I'm clapping <- see?

Penski -- great story! Love the tie back to the pilot at the beginning. You kept the boys very in character throughout the robbery. So like Heyes to take the good stuff for a celebration. Also the boy's reactions to the new bounties were very in keeping with their characters -- Heyes cockey about having a bounty higher than Jesse James and the Kid more cautious and focused on the new language "dead or alive." Well done.

Riders57: I am continually impressed with your consistently entertaining stories and how they are all so different yet always original in terms of plot. This was a great take on the prompt! Loved Pitt Cairn's name! Also enjoyed how Bligh managed to cheat the boys, though I would have hoped/thought they would be a little more suspicious and suspect that maybe he had more money on him than just what he showed them.

Riders - Very good take on the prompt and different too. Liked Heyes and Kid intimidating Bligh to get paid, even if they did get cheated. Clever writing!

Sorry Riders57 and RosieAnnie! I remembered the story's author's name began with an "r" but by the time I finished reading it, I'd lost track of who it actually was. My feedback comment now has the correct name attached to it. I'm sure I'll enjoy your story just as much, RosieAnnie. Both of you write great stories!

LOL Ghis, not to worry. We all have those moments. I seem to recall a Max/Maz mix-up on the old board.

Also, we should give Remuda credit for the bartender's name. She's the one who came up with it, when she was helping me break through a writer's block.

Penski: I had fun reading this. My favorite line was:
"Now, let's go open that safe," Heyes rubbed his hands together in glee.
I actually found myself smiling when I read it. ;D Heyes around a safe is like settinga child loose in an un-guarded candy store.
I loved reading it; and, you know, that Blair fellow did look a bit like Walter Brennan's character.