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Nice fresh thread folks (about 15 pages is the usual :)

1) Maz

It is the lovely Mazkin!!  

Oh, we love that HH has come back with a book instead of ice.
Kid tripped over a …?  Oh, perfect.   (They are wily and underfoot.)

I am adoring the banter and vocabulary input from Heyes.
Wonderful Maz


2) LittleBluestem

Hello there Little Bluestem.    Hey, Lom got a lock for his door!   Fun list of jobs there.  

Is Miss Porter sweet on Lom?  (Well, we all love him ).   Escorting two ladies close to the governor – what could possibly go wrong???  Snirt.
Very nice set up Little Blue.


3) Penski
And Hello to you Penski, oh most faithful of challenge regulars.

What a perfectly episode like opening that was.    Oooh, outlaw turned bounty hunter.  And an ex-gang member to boot.    Plus a (promised) mean Sherriff.  You spoil us.

And, the Kid arrives in the nick of time.  Well, almost – poor old Heyes.

Very episode-esque indeed, Penski.


4) Elleree

It is our bandanny wearer?  How are you enjoying the neck wear?

Good heavens, second story in a row with bad news for Heyes.  Dangled over a mine shaft, no less.

Clever, Kid – tricking our villain into thinking he is dangling over a mine shaft.



5) Remuda

It is the wire dodger extraordinaire!!   Hello Remuda!

Oh dear, too many beans and just possibly too much information.

There is nothing we like better than hearing the two of them bantering – keep teasing, Heyes.  

AH, maybe this is even better than bantering – how long can HH keep quiet?

Poor Heyes!  A little bird poop is supposed to be lucky, but not if it loses you ten dollars!

Revenge raining down from above, indeed.  Clever, clever Remuda.




6) InsideOutlaw

Hello to you Inside Outlaw.

Oh dear, a doctor who can’t even ride.  I feel sorry both for him and for the Kid.

Well, Heyes is still pretty slender – so maybe once he was skinny enough to slip through the bars.  Smile.

And, we still have all the back and forth anger between Heyes and Mac.   Will Mac be redeemed before the end of this???
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Maz McCoy: I love the first line. In fact, I think the monthly challenge could be, "do you have any tingling?" All sorts of vistas open up in my mind with that line. As a kitty mama, I empathize with Curry's injury; I love my cats, but they can definitely be jerks.

Little Bluestem: Well, of course he'd get that door fixed! Who wants Kid Curry coming in with gun drawn? I understand why Our Boys are more than a little disgusted with being called on to do another "favor." And why wouldn't Miss Porter develop an attraction for our favorite Sheriff? I did a challenge entry a few years ago with that theme, so I totally am on board with that.

Penski: No, nothing good happens when Our Boys separate, but financial need keeps forcing them to do it. Dingus McKee is a great name for this character. As someone who's bruised ribs, I really feel empathy for Heyes. It hurts like crazy, and takes FOR-EVER to improve. Here's hoping he doesn't have to cough or sneeze for a while.

Ellerree: Sometimes reacting is better than planning, isn't it? Curry made the right move for sure, and he and Heyes will get out of that cave alive. But oh boy, what a day they had, right? As my mother used to say, you can't win for losing.

Remda: Well, it had to happen sometime, didn't it? Thank goodness they weren't being chased by a posse that day. It's just another day in the life of two traveling men. Here's hoping the next campsite has a stream, where they can both take a nice, relaxing bath.

Inside Outlaw: I think Heyes probably got a lot of satisfaction out of laying Mac low. Can't say I blame him. And Heyes' story of how he got started on a life of crime as a teen-ager rings a little too close to home, even in today's so-called "modern" world. A juvenile conviction can haunt someone forever. Finally, I got a laugh out of a fellow Chicagoan being useless on a horse. That hasn't changed either in the last 140 years.

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No detailed feedback from me for last month, but I read and enjoyed all of your stories. It was hard to pick a favorite one.

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Nightwalker – It’s amazing where you find inspiration for a story!  I remember that cartoon.  Love this description “the room was a pattern of shadows and shades of grey”.  sigh… What a dream!  Love where he and the Kid came from and his appearance.  This is a great line - Her visitor, who’s name ostensibly wasn’t Heyes and definitely wasn’t Smith, rolled his eyes and threw his hands in the air.  “I can’t believe it!  I don’t even know where we are – when we are - and his reputation was here even before us?”
Will be interesting to see if you continue it.  Very loving dream!   bath


Moulin P – Oh, I love missing scene stories.  A nightmare – don’t you hate those.  Love how the Kid settled down and waited, knowing Heyes actually would want to talk about it.  Love this line of Kid’s - “What can be worse than a posse?  Y’know given our current wanted status.”  I’m with the Kid and wouldn’t have been able to keep my promise not to laugh.  Think it might’ve been Humpty Dumpty?  Very amusing challenge!   lol2


Had to  Laughing that both of your challenges had dreams in them – one fantastic dream and the other a nightmare.

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Nightwalker: I love that prompt you listed at the bottom of the story. "Are we in cowboy times?" It led you to a cute story where everyone is a little confused. I laughed when she recognized him, and he went into his usual denial. My favorite line is," I don’t even know where we are – when we are - and his reputation was here even before us?”

Moulin P: We're obviously in pre-Freudian times. If we weren't, someone would be trying to figure out the significance of boiled eggs in the dream state! As it was, poor Heyes! No sympathy from his partner, but then, Curry's sleep was disturbed, too. Of course it was a scary dream - "It was six feet tall and still had it’s shell on!”

Penski: Clever Heyes! Paper is just legal stuff, huh? Heyes' fingers are still itchy. And knowing the DHG without its best leaders. some chickens are the best thing they can have. Fun story!

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Inside Outlaw – aww… I feel for poor Dr. Minner on the back of that horse – must’ve been like an E-ticket ride.  Heyes is unfortunately so right about how some Christians give the majority a bad name by doing horrific things.  And now Heyes is surprising Mac and ME by quoting Scripture!  I was thinking about that and I could see him remember this verse as being part of his memory work as a child (I still recall verses from my memory work in grade school).  Yep, Curry would be cautious – always is!  Love the lines “Nice shot” and “I’ve been practicing”.  Really loving Dr. Minner now that he’s fallen off the horse and tending to the patients.  Okay, Kid warned Mac about talking about them and yet he did.  Mac better be careful.  Poor Heyes… poor Kid watching!  Sorry, but it’s not clear if Kid actually removed the cuffs.  I’m guessing so because the doctor quit asking / objecting.   Dang Mac with his line, “Listenin’ to Heyes scream has made me hungry.”  It did help the doctor come to the decision about who was the better man, though.  Thoroughly enjoyed this chapter and it was posted just in time during the last half of my lunch.  Loved it!  applause

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1) Nightwalker


Hello there Nightwalker, give me a moment while I put the kettle on.

Well, this could be any of us dreaming of a very dishevelled Heyes – smile.
I am adoring the checklist!!! Especially the never let him go.


2) MoulinP

Oooh, I love Jailbreak at Junction City. Everyone is dreaming this challenge, huh? Killer egg… OH, because of the egg trick?
Bless the boys, what a nice duologue




3) Penski

Hello there bandanny wearer!!

I heart Lom. Loving that HH thinks he is a fox in the henhouse with a safe. What a happy ex-outlaw, a safe to keep him warm on the way.
Ah, the famous, “I’m not getting robbed” line.
Awwww poor Kyle, doesn’t get a chance to use the good stuff.
Clever Heyes!! And he is not even telling lies.



4) InsideOutlaw

That poor Doctor Minner, still being jolted over the ground. Oh, poor Heyes too, having his foot poked about.

I am liking the Doctor, he stands up to our boys pretty well.

Oooh, ominous. I foresee a few more twists and turns
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Inside Outlaw: Poor Heyes! I know he's supposed to be getting better, but the process is awful. I am liking the doctor. He's back in his element, doing what he knows to do, and he takes command of the situation. And, he sees clearly, who's "safe" and who isn't.

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MoulinP – What a funny story. Poor Heyes being haunted by a scary nightmare and not even getting sympathy from his partner. To be honest, I was chuckling with Kid as he learned about the content of Heyes’s dream. You sure made me laugh. Thank you :-)

Penski – I loved your story with the two foxes guarding the henhouse. You captured the boys and the atmosphere of the show perfectly. I would love if you would go for it and finish it as a VS episode. The plot has a lot of potential.

InsideOutlaw – Giving Mac his due: he’s always true to himself despite the situation. He’s a mean one and he doesn’t even try to hide it. I’m very glad that you continued your story. It’s good to learn that Kid Curry brought the doctor in time and everyone is on the mend now. I’m looking forward to see how the story will end. It there a way the boys will get rid of Mac without having him immediately on their tail again? What does the good doctor do, know Mac slipped the boys’ identities?

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