Keays - This portion of your story has a very peaceful feel. Not sad really, but more of a readiness to allow life to move on. Anya is a pretty name for Heyes' daughter.
Tashmina - I very much enjoyed your use of the surroundings, smells, the fly who made a nuisance of himself, the worn spot on the carpet, to create an atmosphere of nervous anticipation. Then, you shot the Kid?! In your very first challenge?! Thank goodness for your Hannibal Heyes plan ending! Wonderful!
ChristinaASJ - I dearly love this sweet memory you've given Alice. I really liked the theme of Grandmother's English "forget-me-not blue" being repeated in the china teacup, the doll's dress, and the Kid's eyes. Your use of past tense for telling the story contrasted beautifully with Alice's present tense memory sequence. That technique is not only very interesting, but VERY effective! It adds to your story, making it seem as if those memories are being re-created right now, before Alice's (and readers') eyes. Favorite line: "Forget? Me? Not likely!"
InsideOutlaw - I think the award for "Cutest New Avatar" should go to you! Now, for story comments - Awww... What a lovely glimpse into the tender hearts of my two favorite hardened outlaws! Well written, IO! Clapping!
WichitaRed - Your opening scene was so visual! Gave me the feeling that I was seeing Heyes and Curry seated in some old movie theater, watching Attack of the Killer Tomatoes or something, the Kid totally engrossed, unable to tear his eyes from the screen, capable only of stuffing popcorn into his mouth and whispering idle threats to his babbling partner. Very entertaining. The change of mood for the next scene seemed to roll in like the fog. Nicely done!
Calico - So glad your client cancelled giving Cally Coe a chance to play! What a precious reminder of your wonderful characters from the Heyes and Curry, Early Days stories! Oh... sniff! Forget me knot! How heart-rendingly sad! Clapping through tears.
Penski - Silky O'Sullivan is...! Oh, Penski! I'll bet Walter Brennan would be deeply touched by your lovely tribute. You have written Silky, HH, and KC, beautifully in character. I can definitely see Silky leaving some kind of legacy like this to the boys. We will forget you NOT, Silky!
Maz (The artful wire-dodger) - Your dialog is so well done, like I'm listening to an episode. I laughed all the way through this and loved it, especially the last line. Imagine Hannibal Heyes getting lock-picking advice from a mule! And the funniest part was when... No, maybe it was when Forget-Me-Not... Or when Heyes... Or when the Kid was shaving... Or... Sheesh! Too many funny parts to list!
skykomish - Glad to see you back to writing, skykomish! What a wonderful piece! If I asked nicely, REALLY nicely, do you think I could persuade you to continue this challenge into a full-length story? Ya think? Huh, huh, huh? Please? Loved it!
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